IELTS Masterclass: Online Shopping
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The charts four retail sectors in Canada in terms of the proportion of their internet sales in two years, 2005 and 2010.
Overall, the proportion of online sales for each of the four sectors changed from 2005 to 2010. While the figures for food and beverages and also video games , the figures for the other two sectors fell.
In 2005, the proportion of online sales of food and beverages was 22%, but this to 32% in 2010. The percentage for internet sales of video games also went up, by from the 2005 figure of 18%.
In contrast, the percentages of the online sales of the other sectors decreased. The most dramatic was in the home furnishings retail sector. While this figure was 25% of the total online sales in 2005, it fell to just in 2010.
There was also a in the electronics and appliances sector, which saw a fall from 35% in 2005 to in 2010.
Overall, the proportion of online sales for each of the four sectors changed from 2005 to 2010. While the figures for food and beverages and also video games , the figures for the other two sectors fell.
In 2005, the proportion of online sales of food and beverages was 22%, but this to 32% in 2010. The percentage for internet sales of video games also went up, by from the 2005 figure of 18%.
In contrast, the percentages of the online sales of the other sectors decreased. The most dramatic was in the home furnishings retail sector. While this figure was 25% of the total online sales in 2005, it fell to just in 2010.
There was also a in the electronics and appliances sector, which saw a fall from 35% in 2005 to in 2010.
💎 5 Band 9 Structures & Vocabulary
Cấu trúc In terms of: Xét về mặt… (Cách mở bài Task 1 cực kỳ chuyên nghiệp).
Từ vựng Proportion: Thay thế tuyệt vời cho “Percentage” để tránh lặp từ.
Giới từ Went up by [X%]: Dùng “by” để chỉ khoảng tăng/giảm (khác với “to” chỉ mức đến).
Từ vựng Dramatic fall: Sự sụt giảm đáng kể (ghi điểm cao cho tiêu chí Lexical Resource).
Ngữ pháp Which saw a fall from…: Sử dụng mệnh đề quan hệ để lồng ghép dữ liệu mượt mà hơn.
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