Celebrity Influence on Youth
Date: March 2026 | Topic: Media & Society
Đề bài
Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements and this sets a bad example to the young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Bài làm học viên
In the era of social media, many public figures is famous about1 their luxurious lifestyles rather than their actual talents. I completely agree that this trend set a bad example2 for the younger generation.
Firstly, the obsession with glamour leads to a significant misconception about success3 among young people. When they see influencers becoming rich overnight by posting photos of expensive cars or designer clothes, they start to believe that fame can be achieved without efforts or talents4. Consequently, many students might neglect their studies, hoping to become the famous5 at any cost. This distorted view of reality prevents them from understanding that true success requires hard work and perseverance.
Secondly, this phenomenon encourages materialistic6 in society. Many teenagers nowadays follow materialism, believing that money is more important than spiritual values or moral character. For example, young fans often mimic of7 their idols’ spending habits, even if they cannot afford it. This not only puts financial pressure on their parents but also leads to a shallow culture where individuals are judged by the wealth8 rather than their contributions to society.
In conclusion, I believe that the fame based on wealth and glamour harm9 the youth’s mindset. It is essential for society to promote role models who are recognized for their hard work and meaningful achievements to guide the next generation in the right direction.
Chi tiết lỗi & Đề xuất
PREPOSITION / S-V AGREEMENT
“is famous about” → “are famous for”
Chủ ngữ “figures” số nhiều dùng “are”. Tính từ “famous” luôn đi với giới từ “for”.
S-V AGREEMENT
“trend set” → “trend sets”
Chủ ngữ “this trend” là ngôi thứ 3 số ít.
PREPOSITION
“misconception about” → “misconception of”
Dùng “misconception of something” nghe học thuật và tự nhiên hơn trong Writing.
NOUN NUMBER
“efforts or talents” → “effort or talent”
Khi nói về sự nỗ lực hay tài năng nói chung, ta dùng danh từ không đếm được.
WORD FORM
“become the famous” → “achieve fame”
Dùng “achieve fame” hoặc “become famous” (không có the).
WORD FORM
“encourages materialistic” → “materialism”
Sau động từ “encourage” ta cần một danh từ (chủ nghĩa vật chất).
VERB PATTERN
“mimic of” → “mimic”
“Mimic” là ngoại động từ, không đi kèm giới từ.
ARTICLE
“judged by the wealth” → “wealth”
Không dùng “the” trước danh từ trừu tượng khi nói chung.
S-V AGREEMENT
“fame … harm” → “fame … harms”
Chủ ngữ chính của câu là “fame” (số ít).

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