Children’s Decision Making
Date: March 2026 | Topic: Family & Society
Đề bài
Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Bài làm học viên
The question of whether children should be given the autonomy to make their own choices is a matter of intense debate. While some argue that this could lead to a selfish society1, I believe that empowering children to decide on certain matters is vital for their development.
On the one hand, critics argue that excessive freedom can make children to become2 self-centered. If a child is always allowed to choose what they eat or wear without any guidance, they may start to believe that their desires are more important than those of others. This habit result in3 a lack of empathy and social responsibility. For instance, children who never learn to compromise at home might struggle to work in teams when they enters4 adulthood.
On the other hand, I side with those who believe that making decision for5 everyday matters is a necessary learning process. Firstly, it fosters independence and self-confidence. When children choose their own clothes or hobbies, they learn to express their personality and take responsibility for their prefer6. Secondly, this practice prepares them for more complex choices in the future7. By practicing decision-making on small things, children develop critical thinking skills that are essential in the modern life8.
In conclusion, while total freedom without discipline may lead to selfish9, I believe that letting children make their own choices under parental guidance is beneficial. It strikes a balance between building character and developing essential life skills.
Chi tiết lỗi & Đề xuất
LEXICAL CHOICE
“selfish society” → “society of self-centered individuals”
Dùng cụm danh từ theo sát đề bài hoặc diễn đạt học thuật hơn để tránh lặp từ tính từ đơn giản.
VERB PATTERN
“make … to become” → “make … become”
Cấu trúc: Make someone DO something (không dùng ‘to’).
S-V AGREEMENT
“habit result in” → “habit results in”
Chủ ngữ “This habit” là số ít.
S-V AGREEMENT
“they enters” → “they enter”
Chủ ngữ “they” đi với động từ nguyên thể.
PREPOSITION
“decision for” → “decisions about/on”
Cụm từ chuẩn là ‘make a decision about/on something’.
WORD FORM
“their prefer” → “their preferences”
Sau tính từ sở hữu ‘their’ cần một danh từ.
LEXICAL UPGRADE
“future choices” → “life-changing decisions”
Dùng từ vựng mạnh hơn để chỉ những lựa chọn quan trọng trong đời.
ARTICLE
“the modern life” → “modern life”
Khi nói về ‘cuộc sống hiện đại’ nói chung, không dùng mạo từ ‘the’.
WORD FORM
“lead to selfish” → “lead to selfishness”
Sau ‘lead to’ cần một danh từ (sự ích kỷ).
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