Family Time & Social Issues
Date: March 2026 | Topic: Family & Society
Đề bài
Nowadays there is an increase in social problems involving young people because more parents spent time at work than with their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Bài làm học viên
It is often argued that the rise in juvenile delinquency and other social issues is a direct result of parents spent1 too much time at work. I completely agree with this view because the lack of parental guide2 and emotional support can lead children to make wrong decisions.
Firstly, the absence of parents3 at home means that children often lack the necessary supervision. Without someone to monitor their activities, teenagers are more likely to exposed to4 negative influences from the Internet or bad peer groups. For example, a child who feels lonely might join a gang just to feel a sense of belonging. This lack in attention5 from family members often results in behaviors such as school bullying or substance abuse.
Secondly, parents playing a vital role in shape the moral values6 of their children. When parents are always busy, they miss the opportunity to teach their kids about right and wrong. Children needs7 constant communication to build their character and self-esteem. If they do not receive this at home, they may look for the validations8 from unhealthy sources. This can lead to a generation of individuals who lack empathy and social responsibility.
In conclusion, I believe that the busy working schedules of parents are a major factor contributing to social problems among the youth. Therefore, it is importance9 for parents to strike a balance between their careers and their family life to ensure a healthy develop10 for their children.
Chi tiết lỗi & Đề xuất
VERB TENSE
“parents spent” → “parents spending”
Dùng danh động từ (V-ing) sau giới từ ‘of’ để chỉ một hành động đang diễn ra trong hiện đại.
WORD FORM
“parental guide” → “parental guidance”
Dùng danh từ ‘guidance’ (sự hướng dẫn) thay vì ‘guide’ (người hướng dẫn/sách hướng dẫn).
S-V AGREEMENT
“absence … means” → (Corrected in text)
Dù ‘parents’ là số nhiều, nhưng chủ ngữ chính là ‘The absence’ (số ít).
PASSIVE VOICE
“likely to exposed” → “be exposed to”
Cấu trúc bị động: be + V3/ed. Có nghĩa là ‘bị/được tiếp xúc với’.
PREPOSITION
“lack in” → “lack of”
Danh từ ‘lack’ luôn đi với giới từ ‘of’.
VERB PATTERN
“role in shape” → “role in shaping”
Sau giới từ ‘in’ động từ phải ở dạng V-ing.
S-V AGREEMENT
“Children needs” → “Children need”
‘Children’ là danh từ số nhiều của ‘child’.
ARTICLE / NUMBER
“the validations” → “validation”
‘Validation’ là danh từ không đếm được trong ngữ cảnh này.
WORD FORM
“it is importance” → “it is important”
Sau ‘it is’ cần một tính từ.
WORD FORM
“healthy develop” → “healthy development”
Cần một danh từ sau tính từ ‘healthy’.

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